Chapter 1

The candlelight glinted sharply off the blade of her knife as she set it on the table before her. “So,” she said.

“So,” he returned. His chair creaked as he shifted positions, resting his massive arms on the table before him.

“We have an agreement then?”

He nodded. “Two weeks. I’ll have it for you then.”

She traced the edge of the knife handle with her finger gently, languidly. “Two weeks?”

“If I said two weeks, I meant two weeks. Not a day longer. I’m a man of my word. And,” he said, a hard glint coming into his eye, “I don’t need weapons to prove it, either.”

A corner of her mouth curled up. This one had spunk. Attitude. She liked him. But she said nothing. She was not allowed to like him.

He held her eyes for just a moment longer than he should have before looking away. Ordinarily, she would have been offended, but something about his look made her breath catch in her throat. Was he—? She scrutinized him. Dark hair. Dark eyes. But the prophecy had said the man would have bright eyes, didn’t it? She would swear an oath that it did. She drummed her fingers on the table, uncertain.

He looked up at her, then glanced down at her knife. He looked up again. “Well? Was there something else you wanted?”

The candlelight flickered and, for a moment, reflected off of his eyes. She gasped. Could he know? Only three others knew about her part of the prophecy, and two of those were dead. Of course he couldn’t know. But she did. Suddenly everything about him interested her: his hands, large and calloused; his broad chest; his stubbled chin. Could it be?

“Yes,” she breathed.

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12 Responses to Chapter 1

  1. Ximena says:

    Ms. Starre, I am so happy to have seen this page finally go up! I very fondly remember riding my bike (for the first time) to your apartment and trying my best to convince you this was a good idea. AND LOOK NOW, WOW. 😀

    The website, art, and writing (of course) are all brilliant and I really can’t wait to see more!

  2. Naomi says:

    I can’t wait for more.

  3. Joy says:

    Ooh, how exciting!

  4. YukinoOmoni says:

    Already there’s a cliffhanger.

    Your writing is so nicely done. Descriptive without taking away, and lyrical without being flowery.

    And the art is very nice! Wonderfully done.

    Can’t wait for moooore.

  5. JB Starre says:

    Thank you so much, everyone! :) :) :)

  6. Maria Kelly says:

    This is very good. Are you also posting the episodes to Tuesday Serial as well as Friday Flash?

    • JB Starre says:

      Thank you so much, Maria! Yes, I’ve been posting it to both. I also added it to the Web Fiction Guide in hopes that that might help attract readers. If you know of any other places I should post it, I would love the tips!

  7. Helen says:

    This definitely has me intrigued – good story.

    Welcome to friday flash!

  8. This is wonderful! I’m so glad that I found you on Friday Flash!

    I’m off to read the rest of the story. Great job!

    Eva

  9. Great start! Will definitely be reading the rest, and i’ll try to leave some more comments as I go :)

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